IELTS 17번

If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific example to support your answer.

 

 

     Four 67-floor-skyscrapers emitting its magnificent splendor. Crowed with briliant people, mostly couples and families, all displaying satisfaction on their faces. Town filled with newfangled welfare amenities harmonized with Hwasung's nature and landscape, making it an immaculate residence for people to dwell in........

 

     I bet you have now reached close to the answer I"m thinking of. Yes it's right. Its Dongtan New Town. I have lived here since 2010; have never been disappointed ever since. It's cutting edge facilities, as well as convenient transportation arouse people who have firsted visited Dongtan, making them incapable of keeping their jaws closed.

That being said, one vital change necessary in Dongtan, in my opinion, is regulating the number of entertainment bars, or ANGF, short for Alcoholics with Nude Girls Fest.

 

      Embarrassingly, South Korea is quite renowned for being an ANGF empire. Confucianism spirit of entertaining guests have been distorted to an abnormal form. Koreans(mostly men) seem to have an obsession such as 'guests should be galvanized by alcohol.' This flourished the ANGF industry. Below, I will describe what I don't like about the ANGF culture thriving in Dongtan.

 

      Foremost of all, I abhor the fact that there are simply too many ANGFs in Dongtan. I don't want to believe that the whole Dongtan is like Bansongdong, a place where I live. Bansondong is full of ANGFs. For instance, near the apartment where I live, about 200 meter radius, there are about 6 ANGFs. Whats makes it more dumbfounded is that there are about 12 facilities where they have prostitutes providing sex service to customers. Many who have come to Bansondong for the first time would undoubtfully consider it a place for adult entertainment. But no. Whats shocking is there are actually 2 high schools and one middle school in Bansongdong. To reiterate, there are kids in this freaking pitiful 'dong?' for crying out loud!! I'm afraid that kids would accept the culture of alcohol and follow the same suit when they grow old.

 

     Furthermore, more pedestrians drunk implies more possibilities of sex crimes. As I've stressed before, there are many kids living in Dongtan. That means there are large number of mothers(female) as well. South Korea is in muddled by manifest sex crimes nowadays; I don't want more casualties in Dongtan. In fact, there was an astound incident last week. One man was apprehended in the Central Park for sexual harassment of 2 kids after drinking 2 bottles of soju. I don't want Dongtan women to live in a state of tension, nor do I want Dongtan to be disgraced by the name of 'town of sex-maniacs.'

 

     Finally, less alcoholics directly indicates more cleanness. Everyday morning, as I walk on the pavement right outside of my house, I occasionally feel disgusted seeing drunk people lying on the ground and vomits everywhere. It dwindles my will to start the day fresh. Clearly, people who visit Dongtan for the first time would be disappointed to see the unclean atmosphere. Regulating the ANGFs would evidently alter the 'morning image' of Dongtan.

 

       I love living in Dongtan. I think there is no town like it. When this one blemish is solved, then I would be astonished to see how impeccable Dongtan is!